Chapter 1 -

First panel – side by side squares
Close up of a boot being laced, blurry figure in the background.
“are you ready yet?”

second panel
tv screen with a slider on the bottom saying “7 people in the last week, brutally slain”
“I don’t know what to wear.”


Third panel – half page
Straightening out coat, glaring at the figure.
“man just pick something”
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fourth panel - full page panel
overhead of longhaired man looking over a bed with weapons strewn across it…
“sometimes you are such a woman…”
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First panel – side by side squares
Two getting into an SUV, chattering nondescript

Second panel
Close up of a seat belt buckle going in
“just drive”

third panel – half page
shot from behind of three men one in the middle pointing guns at the two, two men holding them back by their seatbelts.
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4th panel – top left
driver, hand on the wheel calmly
“where to?”

5th panel - top right
man cocking the gun loudly behind his temple
“I’ll just tell you where to turn”

6th panel – bottom left
SUV at a light right turn signal on

7th panel – bottom right
SUV parking in a hotel lot
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8th – top left
men dragging the two in and throwing them to the ground, cuffed
“stay here, you look after them and we’ll take care of the room.

9th – top right
the two being cuffed in the bathroom with the guard standing and watching the door.
“so what do we want to do?”

10th – half page
the two looking at the man, menacingly while shackled to the pipes of the toilet
“haven’t decided yet…”
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11th panel - half page
the two attackers talking in the front room
“alright we’re taking the SUV and parking it around the block”

12th panel – half page
blood pools out from behind the bathroom door.
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13th panel – full page
door bursts open, blood covers everything. A gore covered handcuff lies on the floor undone, the claw covered with meat.
“WHAT THE FUCK!???”
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14th panel
SUV takes off, visible from the window while the leader spins around
“I’ll get you, you FUCK!!!”

15th panel -
smashes out a car window

16th panel – half page
door closing with the taller of the two behind it.
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17th panel – stolen car gets pulled over

18th panel –
much later, night time, SUV rolls up and the tall one gets in – viewed from the inside of the car
“what did you do”

19th panel – half page
scene bathed in blue from the cop light, blood over the tires of the cars a hand not connected to a body but a splatter seen protruding from behind a tire
“nothing to drastic, and you?”
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20th panel – full page

police tape across the hotel room, covered in blood. One body gutted in the bathroom, second one crucified and beheaded upside down on the wall.

---- 10 pages, 20 drawings, first chapter---

tell me what you think Jordan.